Ahh moderation. I find it is both necessary, and hard to get right.
When I was a moderator giving reasons for moderation often helped but took up my time. When I was moderated against then recieving that feedback, and if i still felt wronged, getting feedback from a second moderator stopped further protest.
Both sides can be upset and so care needs to be taken in communications.
- Be more specific in your allegations, link to actual text selections. Show who is alienated in more detail - by links to text.
- In section (1): Explicitely highlight what is considered “making light of” so readers can confirm your description.
- In section (2): There is no mention of intent. No one knows everything. If offense is taken, but none was intended then a mediation must be measured and may even need explanation. You write: “Some communication styles that were unfortunately common in the past are rightfully recognized as inappropriate today.” This may seem patronising to those, for example, viewing current political debaters. It is not all rosy now. Don’t pit the young against the old.
- In Section (3): Your tone seems dictatorial rather than one of moderation.